Walkies

Posted on February 25, 2015 by MrBinks Posted in WritingTagged 100 words, creative writing, dog, flash fiction, flashfiction, short, short stories, story, walking, writing

I used to love it when he took me for walks. The longer the better.
We’d often end up off the beaten track; looking for exciting, unexplored areas behind the city. A quiet escape from the usual bustle of everyday life.

It was tiring. She was always quite demanding but the older she got the more those demands irked. Scratching at the door to be walked, or for food, or to see her friends. The incontinence was bad enough, but one day she turned and bit me.

Last Sunday, I strolled behind as I took her for one last walk.

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46 thoughts on “Walkies”

February 25, 2015 at 10:42 am Reply
Jessie Ansons says:

Ha! Love it 🙂 Wit so dry I had to read it five times just to make sure.
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:52 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Is that a good thing?! 🙂
February 25, 2015 at 10:56 am Reply
rochellewisoff says:

Dear Peter,

A rather poignant tail…er…tale. I like the use of the two points of view. Nice one.

Shalom,

Rochelle
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:54 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Oooooofff! Can’t believe you, of all people, went for that. (But I’m glad you did.)
February 25, 2015 at 11:06 am Reply
J Hardy Carroll says:

Dog’s eye view! Very nice.
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:54 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thanks for reading.
February 25, 2015 at 1:04 pm Reply
Claire Fuller says:

The ‘one last walk’ sounds ominous. Nice story though.
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:54 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thanks Claire.
February 25, 2015 at 1:09 pm Reply
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:

Ouch.. love that incontinence coming from a dog.. wonder what the last walk means.
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:55 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Dun dun Daahhhhh ;D
February 25, 2015 at 1:26 pm Reply
Sandra says:

Hah! good one. I expect he’s planning to push her in front of the next train. That’s dogs for you.
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:55 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Bloody typical. Thanks, Sandra.
February 25, 2015 at 2:27 pm Reply
Snow's Fissures and Fractures says:

I refuse to believe my dog would thing that way about me. She adores me. Right?
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:56 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Suuuurreee….
February 25, 2015 at 2:49 pm Reply
Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

Nice switch of perspective.
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:56 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Cheers HHB.
February 25, 2015 at 3:48 pm Reply
Joe Owens says:

Had to re-read to catch the perspective change, but life always has at least two sides. We sometimes fail to understand and that leads often to conflict, violence or in the least a sense that we do not care. Very nice.
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:57 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thanks for taking the time to read (twice).
  1. February 25, 2015 at 9:48 pm
    Joe Owens says:
    
    I always want to make sure I get the full intent of the author, otherwise I am not fair to him/her or myself as I can miss a really well-crafted story.
February 25, 2015 at 5:36 pm Reply
Michael B. Fishman says:

I liked the swapping of roles in your story.
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:57 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thanks, Michael.
February 25, 2015 at 5:39 pm Reply
Nan Falkner says:

Dear Peter, Good story and I had to read it 4 times. Well done and I love the dogs point of view! Nan 🙂
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:58 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  4 times? I hope that was a fault of the reader and not the writer 😉 Thanks for reading Nan!
February 25, 2015 at 8:16 pm Reply
sustainabilitea says:

Nicely done and tricksy. 🙂

janet
1. February 25, 2015 at 8:58 pm Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thank you.
February 25, 2015 at 10:18 pm Reply
Liz Young says:

Two points of view in one story! Clever. Who was saying the thrid paragraph had me guessing.
1. March 4, 2015 at 8:58 am Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thank you. Glad you were left interested!
February 25, 2015 at 10:48 pm Reply
patrickprinsloo says:

There’s a turn around. Dog’s best friend, indeed.
February 25, 2015 at 11:23 pm Reply
helenmidgley says:

Nicely done 😉
1. March 4, 2015 at 8:58 am Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thanks Hels Bells.
February 26, 2015 at 6:16 am Reply
Jan Brown says:

Turnabout is fair play for our furry friend! Loved reading the dog’s point of view, and loved the surprise ending that turns the story around 🙂
February 26, 2015 at 11:51 am Reply
gahlearner says:

I understood it as seen, and told by the one we don’t see, behind the dog. If I got that right, it’s a painful story, but very well told. I loved the switch of pov.
1. March 4, 2015 at 8:57 am Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  That’s an interesting take, but not one I was going for. Interpretation is an interesting thing!
February 27, 2015 at 12:03 am Reply
joseph elon lillie says:

Oh gosh written from the perspective of the photographer! Very creative. I love it!
February 27, 2015 at 5:00 am Reply
storydivamg says:

I enjoyed the two voices here telling the same tale from opposing points of view.

MG
1. March 4, 2015 at 8:57 am Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thanks MG.
February 27, 2015 at 8:19 pm Reply
Kim J says:

great work, love the perspective
February 28, 2015 at 4:50 am Reply
Jorbi K says:

Really love the contrasted views, as most people seem to. I also like that you chose to put the person’s side in italics. It not only made the separation clear, it reinforced the idea that this viewpoint is, like italics, slanted and indecent. Great job.
February 28, 2015 at 4:55 am Reply
Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist says:

Nice having the three points of view. At first I thought the dog was going to do in the human and suddenly got it.
February 28, 2015 at 7:02 am Reply
dmmacilroy says:

Dear Mr. Binks,

Everyone has nailed down the fine points so I’ll just add a ‘well done’ to this column and drive on.

Aloha,

Doug
1. March 4, 2015 at 8:56 am Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thanks!
February 28, 2015 at 2:38 pm Reply
Inside the Mind of Isadora says:

Just hopping around to read a few entries. I’m a newbie.
Your tale is funny. Very nice …
1. March 4, 2015 at 8:56 am Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thanks for reading, I hope you’ll drop by again.
March 1, 2015 at 11:03 am Reply
AnElephantCant says:

Very neat take, Doug.
1. March 4, 2015 at 8:56 am Reply
  MrBinks says:
  
  Thank you.
March 2, 2015 at 10:54 am Reply
i b arora says:

one last walk? why?