*DING*
Steve stepped over the puddle on the kitchen floor and stared in frustration at the sink.
It was her turn, of that he was sure.
*DING*
He knew he’d cooked sausages last night, and a (rather splendid if he did say so himself) lasagna the night before; he’d even hoovered the house on Sunday. In fact, now he came to think of it, he’d cooked and cleaned for the past 30 days or so.
*DING*
Steve grabbed the cloth with a huff and checked the text he’d been dismissing for the last 2 hours.
“WATERS BROKE. GET HERE NOW.”
This flash fiction/short story, call it what you will, was written for Friday Fictioneers.
Thanks to Rochelle as ever for hosting, and A. Noni Mouse for this week’s photo prompt. Click here to read this week’s stories from other writers around the world.
Oops
Big guilt trip on the way, I think. But for a very good cause.
It’ll take more than some housework to redeem him for this!
Dear Peter,
Love the reading and sound effects. It seems someone hasn’t held up her end of the bargain. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Ouch! He’ll be holding the baby for some time now 🙂 The sound effects were spot on 🙂
Stubborn to the point of foolishness. That is for the chuckle, well done 🙂
I guess he’s cleaning the dog house now… 😀
Hope all’s well.
That’s why we mustn’t ignore the messages & signs…
Hoovered over? I like that!
Nicely done. All the right words to create interest.
What a great comment to receive. Thanks for reading.
I loved the way you gradually built the story up to that last line. Well done.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
Thanks so much.
I think he should do all the housework from now on! Thanks for this witty read.
I love it, including the sound effects. He may have to cook and wash up for a few more days.
The sound effects worked far better than me saying “ding,” which of course was the initial version!
that will “explain” the puddle then…
very good
Thanks!
Wonderful reading and sound effects. Sounds like more than the water is broken.
Thanks for reading 🙂
You’re welcome.
Poor henpecked husband and now father…
Loved this!
Thank you 🙂
O well that was most certainly one message he should have checked
As excuses go, that’s a pretty good one. 😉 Great story!
Thanks!
Not a text you’d want to miss. I’m sure he’ll gladly clean the house and cook from now on. I enjoyed listening to the story with the sound effects and all. Nicely done!
Thanks so much!
Ha ha! Sucked in Steve. Stop complaining and pay attention to your missus! 🙂
Loved the narration and the plot of the story! Especially how you utilized the prompt 🙂
Love hearing the story…so perfectly crafted with the prompt.
I like how you captured how the little things in life are amplified when a larger and more important issues sits waiting in the background. Good story.
Good story Peter! Made me feel a little sorry for Steve.