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Slippery Slope

*DING*

Steve stepped over the puddle on the kitchen floor and stared in frustration at the sink.
It was her turn, of that he was sure. 

*DING*

He knew he’d cooked sausages last night, and a (rather splendid if he did say so himself) lasagna the night before; he’d even hoovered the house on Sunday. In fact, now he came to think of it, he’d cooked and cleaned for the past 30 days or so.

*DING*

Steve grabbed the cloth with a huff and checked the text he’d been dismissing for the last 2 hours. 

“WATERS BROKE. GET HERE NOW.”

This flash fiction/short story, call it what you will, was written for Friday Fictioneers.

Thanks to Rochelle as ever for hosting, and A. Noni Mouse for this week’s photo prompt. Click here to read this week’s stories from other writers around the world.

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33 responses to “Slippery Slope”

  1. neilmacdon

    Oops

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  2. Sandra

    Big guilt trip on the way, I think. But for a very good cause.

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  3. ceayr

    It’ll take more than some housework to redeem him for this!

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  4. rochellewisoff

    Dear Peter,

    Love the reading and sound effects. It seems someone hasn’t held up her end of the bargain. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  5. justjoyfulness

    Ouch! He’ll be holding the baby for some time now 🙂 The sound effects were spot on 🙂

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  6. Iain Kelly

    Stubborn to the point of foolishness. That is for the chuckle, well done 🙂

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  7. Tannille

    I guess he’s cleaning the dog house now… 😀

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  8. Anita

    Hope all’s well.
    That’s why we mustn’t ignore the messages & signs…

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  9. Danny James

    Hoovered over? I like that!

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  10. Bill

    Nicely done. All the right words to create interest.

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    1. MrBinks

      What a great comment to receive. Thanks for reading.

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  11. Susan A Eames

    I loved the way you gradually built the story up to that last line. Well done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks so much.

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  12. Paula Sue Bryant, Writer

    I think he should do all the housework from now on! Thanks for this witty read.

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  13. Gabriella

    I love it, including the sound effects. He may have to cook and wash up for a few more days.

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    1. MrBinks

      The sound effects worked far better than me saying “ding,” which of course was the initial version!

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  14. csheldonblog

    that will “explain” the puddle then…

    very good

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks!

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  15. msjadeli

    Wonderful reading and sound effects. Sounds like more than the water is broken.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for reading 🙂

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      1. msjadeli

        You’re welcome.

  16. Dale

    Poor henpecked husband and now father…
    Loved this!

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    1. MrBinks

      Thank you 🙂

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  17. larry trasciatti

    O well that was most certainly one message he should have checked

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  18. J.A. Prentice

    As excuses go, that’s a pretty good one. 😉 Great story!

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks!

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  19. Brenda’s Thoughts

    Not a text you’d want to miss. I’m sure he’ll gladly clean the house and cook from now on. I enjoyed listening to the story with the sound effects and all. Nicely done!

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks so much!

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  20. trishsplace

    Ha ha! Sucked in Steve. Stop complaining and pay attention to your missus! 🙂

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  21. Aahana Aggarwal

    Loved the narration and the plot of the story! Especially how you utilized the prompt 🙂

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  22. doodletllc

    Love hearing the story…so perfectly crafted with the prompt.

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  23. James McEwan

    I like how you captured how the little things in life are amplified when a larger and more important issues sits waiting in the background. Good story.

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  24. Girl in Niagara

    Good story Peter! Made me feel a little sorry for Steve.

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