Unbelievable Stories

And so it came to pass that my antipodean friend (and yours), Jessie Ansons, challenged me via Twitter to reply to her groovy slice of Friday Fiction (which you can, and should, read here). So, because I don’t like shirking a challenge (and because I was scared she’d call me names if I didn’t) I did. Here goes.


Unbelievable Stories

I’ve been teasing the boy since the day he was born.
His father, my son, thought it was funny, though torn,
‘coz his Mrs, you see, was ne’er fond of a laugh;
spending her days with a stick up her…

ahem

So when he was older, around eight or nine,
I told him a story of these fingers of mine.
The old maze out the back was the perfect of hooks,
and as the story unfolded he gave me a look.

Of fear
Of amazement
Of sadness.
Despair.

But worth it for the cuddle in this comfy old chair.


Catch up with the rest of the Friday Fiction stories over at Rochelle’s blog. 1 photo. 100 words. Endless possibilities.

garden-maze

Responses to “Unbelievable Stories”

  1. rochellewisoff

    Dear Peter,

    Dare I say that your story fits Jessie’s like a hand in a glove–minus two fingers. 😉 Nice job.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Jessie Ansons

      Haha I love this quote Rochelle!

  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I think that it might be worth the two fingers even if they were not for real for that cuddle

  3. Caerlynn Nash

    Aw… always go for the cuddles.

  4. Sandra

    Nice one. 🙂

  5. Jessie Ansons

    Bravo on an excellent #replyfiction Binks! The ahem was my favourite part 🙂

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  7. helenmidgley

    brill 🙂

  8. Priceless Joy

    I loved this! It was wonderful.

  9. caroljforrester

    What a great response, I love the idea of working in tandem with another Friday Fictioneer

  10. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    I REALLY like this!

  11. Margaret

    Very funny and very clever. Most entertaining.

  12. wildbilbo

    Funny well written poem. The rhyming is very well done.
    Cheers
    KT

  13. Liz Young

    Worth it for a cuddle says it all really. Nice story-poem.

  14. adamjasonp

    Cuddles and a—ahem. Funny and warm.

  15. Nan Falkner

    Dear Jesse, I really enjoyed your story! It was funny and clever! Nan 🙂

  16. storydivamg

    Dear Peter,
    You have a knack for rhyme and rhythm that I think you would do well to practice and hone. 🙂 Since I landed here before reading Jessie’s story this week, I shall now pop over there to read exactly how this hand fits a glove.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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