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Sleep now

As he lay there, head throbbing and eyes blinded by the sun, all he could do was think about the could-a, would-a, should-a’s.

He could have done it differently. He could have done it all differently, he conceded. He could have been better. He could have chosen so many other paths.

He shivered as he felt a warmth trickle down his neck.

Would it have made much difference though? 

Perhaps. 
Maybe not to him, but to those around him, sure.

One thing was for certain. 

When she’d asked him the final question, he should have said, “Yes”.



Written for Friday Fictioneers – hosted by the ever-present Rochelle, and with photo prompts contributed by the writing community. See this week’s other writers here.

Responses to “Sleep now”

  1. neilmacdon

    Mysterious and deadly

  2. Sandra

    Very reflective, and very menacing. Nicely done.

  3. Iain Kelly

    We took a similar starting scene and headed in different directions! I guess she didn’t take rejection well.

  4. rochellewisoff

    Dear Peter,

    Mysterious. Perhaps the intro to a larger story. As always, I love your reading.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  5. Susan A Eames

    Chilling and thought provoking piece of writing. Great take on the photo prompt.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  6. Tannille

    Sounds like one hell of a hangover. Thoughts always intrude at our worse.

  7. J Hardy Carroll

    Morbid reflections indeed!

  8. Rowena

    I’m intrigued by the final question. What was it? A forboding mystery. Well done.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

  9. Elizabeth Young

    That trickling warmth sounds ominous.

  10. Keith’s Ramblings

    No use being wise after the event. A chilling tale indeed Mr B.

    Here’s mine!

  11. granonine

    Your narration makes this even more mysterious and decidedly threatening. I like it 🙂

  12. ceayr

    Hmm, intriguing…
    Nicely built, nicely unanswered…

  13. Dora

    That “warmth” trickling down his neck doesn’t bode well for the poor guy’s unfortunate choice. But what DOES it bode? Marvelous story, Peter.

  14. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I think that his sleep will be quite long.

    Wonder if a “yes” would have mattered though

  15. msjadeli

    Sounds like he tangled with the wrong she. Hope he makes it out alive.

  16. Sue

    Oh! So many possibilities with this storyline. Well done.

  17. Bill

    Don’t-cha hate those “could-a, would-a, should-a’s”? But, there it is. I read it and then listened. It made a big difference for me. Well done.

  18. Brenda’s Thoughts

    Mysterious with a remorseful tone. Nicely written!

  19. Na’ama Yehuda

    Oh, I want the WHOLE story now … 😉

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