Last night we discussed show and tell techniques, the extremes of both and how to strike the ideal balance. Below is my show piece using the feeder line “I brought the gardener out a cup of coffee. “Thanks,” he said”
It was interesting to hear some of the other pieces, a great many of which went with a slight Mills & Boon slant to the gardener. I wonder what that says about my class mates?
I brought the gardener out a cup of coffee. “Thanks,” he said as he took the chipped crockery from my hand. I noticed the filth under his fingernails as his rough fingers brushed mine and clasped the drink.
I stepped back, wobbling slightly as I avoided the freshly dug up flower bed.
“Careful,” he instructed, as he wiped the murky brown liquid from his lips with the back of his hand. He took another sip. “Mmm, it’s really good. Thanks again.” I smiled knowingly. The good stuff was still brewing in the kitchen.
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