Me. You. Coffee.

A 100 word story by

MrBinks

·

Feeling good

Steven drummed his fingertips on the steering wheel. By his reckoning he’d now been sat behind this tractor for 15 minutes.

He honked his horn. He honked it hard.

Still nothing.

He turned off the engine but, keeping the battery active, he switched on the radio. Barry White was half way through one of his deep, sexy, love songs.

Steven smiled for the first time in 16 minutes. He loved a good juxtaposition.

Giles (the farmer) stared up at the blue sky. It had been a hard day, and the cushion of hay under his back was feeling damn good.

 

hay-bales-sandra-c

Submitted for Friday Fictioneers photo prompt. See if you can write a piece of flash fiction in 100 words.

 

Tags:

, , , , , , ,

Responses to “Feeling good”

  1. David Stewart

    Nice! He is one patient man, sitting there for 15 minutes. I like Giles’ attitude to things though. (by the way, is it supposed to be “he’d now been sitting behind…”?)

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Ah, grammar, my confusing friend…

      hmm, you’re probably right. I tend to write the way I talk. I don’t talk all that good apparently. 😉

      Thanks for reading.

      Reply
      1. David Stewart

        It’s up to you. I didn’t know if it was a colloquialism or a typo. If it was what you were intending, then I’m not complaining. 🙂

  2. rochellewisoff

    Dear Mr. B.

    A pleasant ending to what could’ve ended with a nasty case of road rage. Nice.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Thanks, Rochelle.

      Reply
  3. Sandra

    When a farmer needs a break, he needs a break. I hope Steven’s got tons of patience.

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      😀

      Reply
  4. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    If Barry White had been on the radio, I would have reached for my gun.

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      I’d have reached for your gun too.

      Reply
  5. writeamy

    I thought this was going to end with a confrontation. Instead both characters just needed a little break from their day. Nice.

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Tricked you! ner ner ner ner ner ; )

      Reply
  6. sustainabilitea

    I enjoyed the comments as much as your story. As David said, it could be “had been sitting” or you could say “he’d sat” and use a few words elsewhere. Either would work.

    janet

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Tis fair comment.

      Reply
  7. patriciaruthsusan

    Well-done and humorous. In a town with narrow roads that would be a bit problem.

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for reading 🙂

      Reply
  8. patriciaruthsusan

    Sorry about the typo. I meant “big” problem.

    Reply
  9. siobhanmcnamara

    Nice story – the joys of rural living!

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Thanks!

      Reply
  10. K.Z.

    i thought this was moving towards a dark direction, so the ending was definitely a pleasant surprise 🙂

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      There’s an awful lot of doom and gloom around here of late, I thought it was nice to have a happy ending for once 😉

      Reply
  11. helenmidgley

    I hate tractors 😉

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      But they’re so good at…er… trac-ing.

      Reply
  12. camgal

    Very entertaining and amusing as usual Mr. B 🙂

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Oh you, you’ll make me shy! Thank you for reading and commenting. Means a lot.

      Reply
      1. camgal

        Very welcome 🙂

  13. Riya Anne Polcastro

    Steven must have some crazy patience. I would be freaking out!

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      And me!

      Reply
  14. Bryan Ens

    I might have been reaching for Bjorn’s gun too…but not because of what was on the radio

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      I wonder if Bjorn has a licence for that thing?

      Reply
  15. talesfromthemotherland

    I loved the attitude here. “Steven smiled for the first time in 16 minutes. He loved a good juxtaposition.” < That is just wonderful!

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      \o/ Thanks! 🙂

      Reply
  16. bloggedartistry

    Well done! I saw the sedan in the photo and thought about using that too.

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Cheers for reading 🙂

      Reply
  17. caroljforrester

    I love the ending though after fifteen minutes I would be looking for the quickest escape route.

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      You and me both! 🙂

      Reply
  18. patrickprinsloo

    That’s funny stuff.Farmer Giles knows how to live! (How to you get to be the first on the list here?)

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Thanks, Patrick.
      As for being first… The pic goes up just as I’m sipping coffee on a Wednesday morning. I tend not to think too much about what I’m writing and just let it flow, double check I’ve hit my 100 words and then hit post.

      …thinking about it, I should probably take a little more care.

      Reply
  19. storydivamg

    If one must be stuck behind an immovable object on the road, the strains of Barry White should at least take some of the pressure off. I have to say, Giles needs to get up and move his issues off the road soon. 🙂

    Cheers!
    MG

    Reply
  20. AnnIsikArts

    I think the farmer would have reached for his gun, too, if he’d had his snooze interrupted by a tourist blasting his car horn AND Barry White at him. Believe me, I know. I’ve had a French ‘farmer’ shoot past me into my garden, as I stood in it.

    Reply
  21. Jan Brown

    Hahaha! That really does sound like a relaxing break — for Giles :-). Good story with a fun twist!

    Reply
  22. shailajav

    He has probably been in tons of jams before 😉 Cool take.

    Reply
  23. Nan Falkner

    Great Story Mr. Binks! Love it, and I love Barry White on radio – tell Bjorn to put the gun DOWN! Love it. Nan

    Reply

Leave a reply to Jan Brown Cancel reply