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A 100 word story by

MrBinks

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Knock knock

“Are you completely sure this is it?” Colin asked.

Keith stood with one hand on his bicycle handlebars and one hand stroking his chin. He was sure he’d followed the map precisely.

“I mean, I expected it to look a bit, I dunno, different,” Colin mused.

“This is it,” Keith replied confidently. “It has to be it. Pass me the book.”

Colin hopped off his bike, reached inside his backpack and handed his friend a withered tome.

Turning to page 665, Keith recounted the words with gusto, “Instablam, Faccitaad, Twittstable. We beg of you, open now the gates of Hell!”

 

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This piece was submitted as part of Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. 1 photograph. 100 words. Over 120 people taking part.

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Responses to “Knock knock”

  1. Gunn’s Cabin Fever

    Very quick and very good!

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. I know what you mean about “quick” too. I read it a few times before publishing and had to check I’d hit 100 words each time as it reads really fast.

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  2. rochellewisoff

    Dear Peter,

    And the next page is 666. Aren’t you the sly fox? Intriguing. Not going through that door.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. MrBinks

      Hey, I’m not just a furry beard 😉

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  3. Locomente

    Nice and interesting!

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  4. Snow’s Fissures and Fractures

    And thus Colin and Keith’s bogus journey begins!

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    1. MrBinks

      EXCELLENT!

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  5. wmqcolby

    Looks like Dante’s playing the Palace this time around. Cool job, Binks!

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    1. MrBinks

      🙂 Thanks a lot.

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  6. Hannah

    Love a good gates of hell story–and a mistaken gate to hell is even better!

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for reading – glad you liked it.

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  7. caroljforrester

    Very creative. I love the idea of a guy on a bike just popping out to try and open the gates of hell. Very amusing.

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    1. MrBinks

      Kids, eh! 🙂

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  8. Caerlynn Nash

    Sounds to me like the door to “social” hell! Good one! Very clever! 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      he he 😀

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  9. aliciajamtaas

    Great take on the story and the names Instablam, Faccitaad, Twittstable are so fitting. I especially like Instablam.

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    1. MrBinks

      Instablam needs to be a thing, I think. 🙂

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  10. K.Z.

    Instablam, Faccitaad, Twittstable. lol the gates of hell indeed. imaginative and amusing 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks KZ.

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  11. Woman_on_Pause

    Page 665 leads everyone to Walmart. 😉 I truly enjoyed this. It was fun and a very complete short read.

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    1. MrBinks

      Why thank you.

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  12. helenmidgley

    I loved the names Keith & Colin, creates a sort of farcical edge to the devil worship. I would have loved to see what you had the devil looking like 😉

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    1. MrBinks

      I’ve used those names in a few stories now, I don’t know why but they amuse me 😀

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  13. elmowrites

    Interesting choice of magic words there. I like the characters you created

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for reading.

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  14. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    You have a lot woven into those quick 100 words.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks ever so much. I hadn’t even had coffee, either!

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  15. JKBradley

    Is that a one-way door?

    Thanks!

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  16. storydivamg

    A fun, lighthearted story with a teeny twist of darkness at the end. Good stuff.

    MG

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    1. MrBinks

      Cheers for reading, MG.

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  17. Jan Brown

    Loved this all the way through. Instablam! The devil has a sense of humor 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      What a lovely comment – thank you.

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  18. anupam joseph

    hii I am new here…btw …gr8 story in just 100 words…

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks, glad you enjoyed it.

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  19. elappleby

    This was fun, Mr Binks – but is Twittstable really one of the words to open the gates of Hell? I think they may have the wrong book 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      I think you might be right.

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  20. Liz Young

    Very good – although I saw them as the gates of Heaven!
    Do you have a personal challenge to be the first every week?

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    1. MrBinks

      Generally the photo goes up on a Wednesday just as I arrive at my desk and crack my knuckles. I like to get some writing down before I start work and before the office folk arrive. It’s a lovely way to kickstart the day.

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  21. Jessie Ansons

    Ha! Page 665 is so clever. And first again! By the time I got around to it this week there were already 48 spots gone!

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    1. MrBinks

      It’s really not an ego thing (as I’m sure some people probably think). It’s just convenient timing for me, a nice gentle 10 minute writing exercise with my morning coffee.

      Glad you liked it!

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  22. Jessie Ansons

    As a side note, I’ve been wanting to ask you how in your email notifications you don’t send the whole post but you have a ‘read more of this post’? Is there an easy way to do that because I really like it!

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  23. Lindaura Glamoura

    I hope this was supposed to be funny, because it really made me laugh. Well done.

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    1. MrBinks

      Mr Binks – taking subtlety to a new level! 😉 Thanks for reading.

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  24. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I wonder what happened to worlddisgrace and bugger..?

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    1. MrBinks

      😀

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  25. patrickprinsloo

    Bravo. Love the 665. Clever piece.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for reading – glad you enjoyed it.

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  26. BrainRants

    Funny but foreboding. They obviously have no idea what they’re getting into.

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    1. MrBinks

      ah, it’s probably nothing 🙂

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      1. Shandra

        famous, or infamous, last words for sure.

  27. Shandra

    Oooo. Careful what you conjure Children. It just may come true. Nice story. and thanks for the blog follow last week. Appreciate it!

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    1. MrBinks

      🙂 Glad you enjoyed it.

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  28. Dee

    Interesting use of social media as a gateway to hell… some may say you are spot on!
    Well written and very enjoyable Mr Binks
    Dee

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks Dee.

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  29. Sun

    i love how the characters are looking for the door into hell but the entrance area doesn’t quite fit their expectations. your story . . . quite creative. 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks very much.

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  30. patriciaruthsusan

    Mr. Binks, Good story. I believe they better turn around and go back the other way. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

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  31. Nan Claire Falkner

    Mr. Binks – Great job with the prompt! Cute story and I bet those guys will be sorry! I also love the way they think it doesn’t look like the opening to Hades Nan 🙂

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