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Up, high

“So, now what?”

– What do you mean, “now what?”

“I mean, how the hell am I going to get down?”

– oooh. Yeah. Gotchya. Hmm. We could jump I suppose.

“Jump? Are you serious? It’s at least 50 feet high!”

– It’s more like 8, really.

“Shut up. This is your fault. I never wanted to climb up here in the first place.”

– Yes you did. That’s why you did.

“Shut up. Why do I ever listen to you?”

– Because nobody else talks to you?

“Shut. Up!”

–

“Right. How are we going to get down?”

–

This piece was submitted as part of Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. 1 photograph. 100 words. Over 120 people taking part. And hey, if you still can’t get enough – why not check out my almost-FREE eBook, People Watching. US link here, UK link there.

 

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35 responses to “Up, high”

  1. appropriateadult

    A super tale. Really enjoyed that, all 100 words of it. Thanks for sharing.

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    1. MrBinks

      No, no, thank you for reading.

      Reply
  2. Sandra

    Oops, I went for the dialogue story as well. Enjoyed your story; why do I think the dialogue is between a male and a female??? 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      Ha, 3 stories down and 2 are dialogue only 🙂 Can see a few “up in a tree” stories this week.

      I’m not telling you who the conversation was between. I know, of course, but I like that it can be interpreted different ways. Glad you liked it.

      Reply
  3. Snow’s Fissures and Fractures

    It’s so easy to get into trouble, especially in the company of a friend. 😀

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    1. MrBinks

      It’s hard enough staying out of trouble with yourself for company! 😉

      Reply
  4. patriciaruthsusan

    Mr. Binks, Humorous and good story as usual. I enjoyed the dialogue. I could see two young boys about age 7 or 8 arguing. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for commenting, Susan. Glad you liked this week’s story.

      Reply
  5. sustainabilitea

    I saw an internal dialogue, perhaps between the narrator and his evil twin Skippy. 🙂 No matter who’s on either side of the discussion, I enjoyed it.

    janet

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    1. MrBinks

      Keen eyes 😉

      Reply
  6. hafong

    All in dialogue. Very good! I’m jealous though. 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      I’ve been meaning to do one like that for a while. This picture helped. I actually wrote an all dialogue piece last week (but not for FF) too, https://meyoucoffee.wordpress.com/2014/06/19/time-management/

      Reply
  7. patrickprinsloo

    Even 8 ft seems a lot! I wonder what other similar conversations those two have had?

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    1. MrBinks

      Exaggerations: we’re all prone to them at some time or another, I’m sure.

      Reply
  8. Courtney Wright

    Great Story! Loved it! 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks, Courtney. Very kind.

      Reply
  9. Woman_on_Pause

    I imagined him talking to himself! Loved this!

    Reply
    1. MrBinks

      Love is a strong word. Be careful where you use it. (I accept.)

      Reply
      1. Woman_on_Pause

        🙂

  10. paulmclem

    Lol. Up to your usual high standards, MrBinks. Good one.

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    1. MrBinks

      Oh crap… I have standards now?! Thanks for reading!

      Reply
  11. helenmidgley

    I was thinking he was talking to himself as well. Great bit of dialogue. But where are the names, YOU ALWAY HAVE NAMES 😉

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    1. MrBinks

      You have to imagine them/it this week. TOO MUCH PRESSURE!

      Reply
      1. helenmidgley

        lol

  12. Karen Whitelaw

    You should write scripts you have such a good ear for dialogue. Good story, Mr Binks.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks Karen. I’ve written a few before (or tried) and am in the planning stage of something right now. It’s making time for it that is the hard part.

      Reply
  13. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Oops climbing is a dangerous matter.. Better know how to get down..

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    1. MrBinks

      I quite agree.

      Reply
  14. Mike

    This story brings back wonderful memories with my brothers when we were growing up on the farm and climbed up a tree to be the bee honey. … Let me tell you — no one needed to encourage us to jump! We couldn’t get to the pond fast enough.

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    1. MrBinks

      Always good to stir up old memories – glad I could be of assistance!

      Reply
  15. Horus

    Guess they were too busy to climb to notice how far they are up! 🙂
    Being with someone does tend to do that !

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  16. draliman

    Eight feet can feel like fifty when you’re stuck up a tree! Great dialogue.

    Reply
  17. Riya Anne Polcastro

    Why do I have a feeling the other voice is in their head??? Excellent story 🙂

    Reply
  18. Liz Young

    Great dialogue – and I want to know if he/she/they got down!

    Reply
  19. subroto

    I climbed up a water tower once and I think I had a similar conversation with the friend who instigated it all 🙂

    Reply

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