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A 100 word story by

MrBinks

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Walkies

I used to love it when he took me for walks. The longer the better.
We’d often end up off the beaten track; looking for exciting, unexplored areas behind the city. A quiet escape from the usual bustle of everyday life.

It was tiring. She was always quite demanding but the older she got the more those demands irked. Scratching at the door to be walked, or for food, or to see her friends. The incontinence was bad enough, but one day she turned and bit me.

Last Sunday, I strolled behind as I took her for one last walk.

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Responses to “Walkies”

  1. Jessie Ansons

    Ha! Love it 🙂 Wit so dry I had to read it five times just to make sure.

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    1. MrBinks

      Is that a good thing?! 🙂

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  2. rochellewisoff

    Dear Peter,

    A rather poignant tail…er…tale. I like the use of the two points of view. Nice one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. MrBinks

      Oooooofff! Can’t believe you, of all people, went for that. (But I’m glad you did.)

      Reply
  3. J Hardy Carroll

    Dog’s eye view! Very nice.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for reading.

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  4. Claire Fuller

    The ‘one last walk’ sounds ominous. Nice story though.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks Claire.

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  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Ouch.. love that incontinence coming from a dog.. wonder what the last walk means.

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    1. MrBinks

      Dun dun Daahhhhh ;D

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  6. Sandra

    Hah! good one. I expect he’s planning to push her in front of the next train. That’s dogs for you.

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    1. MrBinks

      Bloody typical. Thanks, Sandra.

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  7. Snow’s Fissures and Fractures

    I refuse to believe my dog would thing that way about me. She adores me. Right?

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    1. MrBinks

      Suuuurreee….

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  8. Helena Hann-Basquiat

    Nice switch of perspective.

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    1. MrBinks

      Cheers HHB.

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  9. Joe Owens

    Had to re-read to catch the perspective change, but life always has at least two sides. We sometimes fail to understand and that leads often to conflict, violence or in the least a sense that we do not care. Very nice.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for taking the time to read (twice).

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      1. Joe Owens

        I always want to make sure I get the full intent of the author, otherwise I am not fair to him/her or myself as I can miss a really well-crafted story.

  10. Michael B. Fishman

    I liked the swapping of roles in your story.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks, Michael.

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  11. Nan Falkner

    Dear Peter, Good story and I had to read it 4 times. Well done and I love the dogs point of view! Nan 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      4 times? I hope that was a fault of the reader and not the writer 😉 Thanks for reading Nan!

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  12. sustainabilitea

    Nicely done and tricksy. 🙂

    janet

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    1. MrBinks

      Thank you.

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  13. Liz Young

    Two points of view in one story! Clever. Who was saying the thrid paragraph had me guessing.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thank you. Glad you were left interested!

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  14. patrickprinsloo

    There’s a turn around. Dog’s best friend, indeed.

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  15. helenmidgley

    Nicely done 😉

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks Hels Bells.

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  16. Jan Brown

    Turnabout is fair play for our furry friend! Loved reading the dog’s point of view, and loved the surprise ending that turns the story around 🙂

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  17. gahlearner

    I understood it as seen, and told by the one we don’t see, behind the dog. If I got that right, it’s a painful story, but very well told. I loved the switch of pov.

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    1. MrBinks

      That’s an interesting take, but not one I was going for. Interpretation is an interesting thing!

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  18. joseph elon lillie

    Oh gosh written from the perspective of the photographer! Very creative. I love it!

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  19. storydivamg

    I enjoyed the two voices here telling the same tale from opposing points of view.

    MG

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks MG.

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  20. Kim J

    great work, love the perspective

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  21. Jorbi K

    Really love the contrasted views, as most people seem to. I also like that you chose to put the person’s side in italics. It not only made the separation clear, it reinforced the idea that this viewpoint is, like italics, slanted and indecent. Great job.

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  22. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

    Nice having the three points of view. At first I thought the dog was going to do in the human and suddenly got it.

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  23. dmmacilroy

    Dear Mr. Binks,

    Everyone has nailed down the fine points so I’ll just add a ‘well done’ to this column and drive on.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks!

      Reply
  24. Inside the Mind of Isadora

    Just hopping around to read a few entries. I’m a newbie.
    Your tale is funny. Very nice …

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for reading, I hope you’ll drop by again.

      Reply
  25. AnElephantCant

    Very neat take, Doug.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thank you.

      Reply
  26. i b arora

    one last walk? why?

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