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A 100 word story by

MrBinks

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Toby and the bats

“There are bats up there,” pointed David. “Vampire bats.”

Toby shut him down almost immediately. “No there aren’t,” he said, his voice quivering.

Kimberly, 2 years above, caught the boys looking up at the tower.

“Toby’s right,” she said, “there aren’t any bats because they’ve all been frightened off by the ghosts. That’s the headteacher’s tower. The naughtiest kids went there, and were often forgotten about. Grown-ups have a habit of that. Ever heard the saying “out of sight, out of mind”? Well you don’t get much more out of sight than up there.”

“Bats,” muttered Toby. “It’s definitely bats.”

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Written as part of Friday Fictioneers, hosted as ever by Rochelle. This week’s photo was submitted by Dale Rogerson – thanks Dale! Go check out the other stories submitted here.

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Responses to “Toby and the bats”

  1. Dawn M. Miller

    LOL…love this!

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  2. justjoyfulness

    Very spooky!

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  3. Dale

    Nothing like scaring each other with various stories. I say there are definitely bats… with ghosts!

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  4. R.M. Carlson

    You had me at “vampire bats!”

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  5. rochellewisoff

    Dear Mr. B,

    Kids love to scare each other, don’t they? Fun story in dialogue.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. elmowrites

    This is so true to life, right from Toby’s first trembling insistence to his final declaration. The joy of kids scaring each other.

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  7. plaridel

    imaginative kids… but what if… 🙂

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  8. msjadeli

    So cute. Toby was singing a different tune by the end.

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  9. thisobscurelife

    haha poor Toby. This sounds like something my sister and brother would do to me when I was a kid 😉

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  10. granonine

    Bunch of kids trying to scare each other to death 🙂 What fun!

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  11. The Sicilian Storyteller

    A good game of chicken, played by kids across the world for centuries!

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  12. Sandra

    You can always rely on the views of an elder sibling to conclude the debate. Lovely! Sorry if this appears twice. After commenting I posted and moved on before WordPress had finished displaying an endless array of boxes I must tick before allowing the post to go through.

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