Me. You. Coffee.

A 100 word story by

MrBinks

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Over the hill

The 7th was a par 5. A long par 5 at that. If they’d let you have a par 6 it would have been a par 6.

Anyway, I teed off and hit a lovely ol’ shot. Straight down the fairway. Geoff followed. Landed in the rough about 45 yards from me.

No change there.

Shot 2 just about got us both over the hill. It was a real blind shot. The crest was such that you always have to wait for the bell to ring before you play.

Someone should have told the jokers behind us.

Poor old Geoff.

david-stewart

Submitted for Friday Fictioneers photo prompt. See if you can write a piece of flash fiction in 100 words.

 

 

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Responses to “Over the hill”

  1. David Stewart

    D’oh, poor Geoff. Can they write it down as a hole-in-one-poor-sucker?

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    1. MrBinks

      You would, wouldn’t you! 🙂

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    2. Nan Falkner

      Good one David!

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  2. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    I think I know those jokers! 😉

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    1. MrBinks

      *shakes fist*

      _o/*

      Reply
  3. rochellewisoff

    Dear Mr. B.

    Your story almost had coffee coming out my nose. When will I learn? Cute story. I enjoyed it.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. MrBinks

      Thank you, Rochelle. My apologies on the caffeinated nasal douche.

      Reply
  4. victoriabruce

    I always golf was deceptively safe, until a golf ball shattered the window. Great story!

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks so much!

      Reply
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  6. claireful

    Lovely writing. I really like how you haven’t told us what happened, but we know.

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    1. MrBinks

      What a lovely comment to read. Thank you!

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  7. patriciaruthsusan

    Well-written and very funny. I laughed out loud. It wasn’t so funny for Geoff though.

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    1. MrBinks

      Yay! Laughter, that’s all I’m after.

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  8. K.Z.

    lol oh, poor Geoff, i probably shouldn’t laugh but LOL 🙂

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    1. MrBinks

      Glad you enjoyed 🙂

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  9. sustainabilitea

    The perfect start to my reading day. “Fore!”

    janet

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks Janet 🙂

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  10. wmqcolby

    Got his bell rung, all right …

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  11. atrm61

    Don’t play golf ,nor do I know anything about it but got the cool twist nevertheless 😀

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks!

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      1. atrm61

        🙂

  12. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Is it true that the souls of dead golfers live on in Albatrosses?

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    1. MrBinks

      Yes. Yes it is.

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  13. Karen Whitelaw

    I love stories with unexpected endings, Mr Binks. Great!

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    1. MrBinks

      I’m pleased you liked it. I do hope you’ll flick through some of my other ramblings. They go well with coffee and a biscuit.

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  14. Courtney Wright

    “rinnngg my beeelllllll…ring my bell….ooo ooo” Sorry! I just couldn’t resist!! Great story! 😉

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    1. MrBinks

      GREAT. Now *I* have that in my head.

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      1. Courtney Wright

        He he he…that was my plan!!! muwahhh! 😉

  15. storydivamg

    Fun and funny. Poor Geoff indeed.

    MG

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    1. MrBinks

      I try to put the ny in funny. No. Wait. I… oh forget it.

      Thanks for reading!

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  16. Helena Hann-Basquiat

    Something tells me I’m missing a golf joke….

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  17. Bryan Ens

    Oops. Those blind shots can really be a killer! (yes, that pun was intended) 🙂

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  18. JackieP

    That made me laugh. Good one!

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    1. MrBinks

      My work here is done…

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  19. Jan Brown

    Oh! Ouch! Poor, hapless Geoff. Does he have a hard head to withstand the shot???

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  20. Nan Falkner

    Good story – Golf with Geoff and a Giant Headache!

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks 🙂

      Reply
  21. silentlyheardonce

    Ouch I don’t know much about golf but those balls are hard. Good story.

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    1. MrBinks

      They sure are! Thanks for reading.

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  22. Sara Healy

    I love it when a post makes me laugh so loudly, my cat runs from the room. As my husband plays golf, I definitely appreciated the humor in this short-short. What fun. There’s nothing better than a well written story that make you laugh:~)

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    1. MrBinks

      Really glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the lovely comment.

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  23. camgal

    Poor Mr. Geoff, cute story Mr. Binks. I could not help but smile as I read it 🙂 My brother and I have even tried teaching my Mum how to play golf so I was able to value the humour.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks! 🙂

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  24. hugmamma

    A tightly written story. Love it! Not being a golfer however, I think I missed the punch line. 😦

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    1. MrBinks

      So, you missed the punch line but still enjoyed the story? I’d call that a win in my books!

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  25. patrickprinsloo

    That was clever. Nicely written.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thanks for the lovely comment.

      Reply
  26. talesfromthemotherland

    I love the simplicity of this piece, that is humorous and clever at the same time. Really well played, Mr Binks.

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    1. MrBinks

      Thank you. I do try to keep it simple. Coz you know… my brain and stuff.

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      1. talesfromthemotherland

        It’s not always easy to write something that is clean and simple, without feeling like you have to explain or throw out too many details, but still tells such a great story. I love that! Seems like your brain… and stuff… works really well. 😉

  27. Riya Anne Polcastro

    Thanks for the chuckle!

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    1. MrBinks

      thanks for the comment 🙂

      Reply
  28. Ade Branwell

    Great opening paragraph and a really oblique take on the prompt. Loved it!

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  29. MrBinks

    Thanks for the comment, I like to wear my stories at a jaunty angle.

    Reply
  30. tinkerbelle96

    Poor Geoff! What a pity we’re all laughing at his plight though 😀

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