-This lollipop tastes funny.
That’s nice dear. What lollipop?
-This one.
But I didn’t give you a…
-I found it.
Where?
-Here.
Where is here?
-If you look at me, you’d see.
You got it from the floor?
-Yes.
Why?
-I was hungry.
If you’re hungry, then you ask mummy or daddy for something.
-I did. But then I found a lollipop.
I don’t think you did.
-But it’s on a stick?
It is. But I don’t think it’s a lollipop, Sweetie.
-What is it then?
That’s a good question. Could you give it to mummy?
-No. It’s my lollipop.
This piece was submitted as part of Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. 1 photograph. 100 words. Often with over 100 people taking part.
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Dear Peter,
I think mummy needs to snatch that before he puts it in his mouth. Yuck! Cute dialogue.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks for the kind comment, Rochelle.
Ha ha. How many conversations with children go this way? Jolly well observed piece of writing. Liked it. A lot.
Cheers, sir.
Funny and yucky at the same time, that is a serious accomplishment.
huzzah!
Time for a good swish of Listerine…. or maybe soap top teach him/her a lesson
Cute dialogue. Randy
Thanks, glad you liked it.
Really well observed dialogue with the distracted mother. I have been there, I’m sure.
Claire
Thanks – pleased that you noticed the distracted mum 🙂
This has the irrefutable ring of five year old logic about it. 🙂 Well done.
What do you mean, 5 year old? This was a conversation I had with my mum two days ago. 😉
Great, Binks! You caught the essence of the five year-old very well. 🙂
Cheers!
You made me say “Eeeoooo! ” out loud. Good job:)
ha ha
This was my first instinct as well. How many times I have dove at my child before he put something disgusting in his mouth? You wrote it well.
It’s more a diary entry than anything 😉
This is perfect! I thought the same thing…. YUCK!!!!
Perfect is strong, but I’m glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting.
A parent’s nightmare (one of many). Very realistic.
Thanks for reading.
interesting,wish i could attempt something like this
There’s nothing stopping you! Go for it.
Dear Mr. Binks,
Mummy should just let him eat it. Funny and realistic take on the prompt.
Aloha,
Doug
Thanks Doug.
I don’t think mummy will be able to snatch it now. Too late.. it’s his lollipop already 😀 haha! Good take on the prompt.
Thanks for reading!
Wow, you’ve met my toddler then :).
Cute story, well driven by the short and endearing dialogue.
Yours and mine both! 🙂 Thanks for the lovely comment.
Fun. Hope it’s nothing too bad.
Who knows? 🙂
I love this one! I could easily see my son doing that when he was younger…and maybe still
Lovely comment, thanks for reading.
Kids! right! my son picks up just about anything!!! cool observation.
Glad you liked it.
Good dialogue this week, Mr. Binks. A parent’s nightmare for sure.
Cheers!
MG
Glad you liked the dialogue, MG; there wasn’t much else in there to like if you didn’t ;D
Dear Mr. Binks – Cute story and Mummy had better jump before he puts into his mouth! Great story! Nan 🙂
…again.
Cute. Made me smile. So like a precocious child.
Thank you.
Totally nailed that mom and child back and forth! Nice job, Mr Binks!
Thank you, glad your thought so.
I like the rhythm of this. It reads like ‘rap’ and that’s exactly how mother/child dialogues can sound. Well done. I’ll have to remember to think of dialogue in terms of rhythm. I suppose it’s a sort of music.
I hadn’t consciously noticed, but thank you.